Unseen Friend

The Lamp —

It's time for another rap, feels like years since the last one, but the new one is called "Unseen Friend". Read it and tell me what you think!


Smelling the breaze of the sapphire sky

Smiling my joy to the setting sun

This moment I cherish as a high

But not all have been like this one

Sometimes I was chained by the lows and grief

Never thought I could turn another leaf

Exhausted I was with no hope to breathe

But the answers lay close beneath


Though I can't see you

I know you're always there

Saved me from darkness, from the jaws of despair

You're someone I can trust

Someone I can turn to

Compassionate and Just

Giver of Peace, beyond the end

You're my Unseen Friend


Smelling the breaze of the sapphire sky

Smiling my joy to the setting sun

This moment I cherish as a high

But not all have been like this one

Sometimes I was chained by the lows and grief

Never thought I could turn another leaf

Exhausted I was with no hope to breathe

But the answers lay close beneath


Though I can't see you

I know you're always there

Saved me from darkness, from the jaws of despair

You're someone I can trust

Someone I can turn to

Compassionate and Just

Giver of Peace, beyond the end

You're my Unseen Friend


Ya'qub — Tue, 3 Mar 2009 - 15:03

NOt bad, not bad at all. But it isn't finished! It needs at least 2 verses, yet you've only written one. And even that verse isn't long enough - it's only 8 bars and it should be 16. Every rapper writes 16 bar raps, Muslims shouldn't be any different! 😃


The Lamp — Wed, 11 Mar 2009 - 10:41

Yeah thanks guys.

Yaqub, mate the reason why I've made this short is because the others that I've written are longer, so a little variety doesn't hurt.